求现象分析型英语四级作文范文

范文来自《2010年6月英语四级作文考前预测范文》

预测作文（四）
Teenagers' Studying Abroad

1. 现在有很多青少年出国留学
2. 有些人认为这种做法是有益的
3. 我认为这种观点是不对的

【范文】
Recently it seems that among the students who choose to study abroad, there are more and more-teenagers who study in high schools or even elementary schools. Many people, especially the parents, think it will certainly do good to their chidren because the independent life will make them learn confidence and perseverance. Moreover, the quality of overseas education is often higher, thus the child stands a better chance of entering a better university and getting a better job in the future.

After careful consideration, I have to say the above view is more than biased. On the one hand, early independent life is not necessarily good, if the child cannot receive proper guidance and tender care from both teachers and parents. On the other hand, the educational quality is also a question—too many foreign schools aim at earning money. When the children come back, who can guarantee that they can adapt to the fierce competition here?

We can see clearly that although teenagers' studying abroad may bring favorable results, there are still a lot to worry about. It seems necessary for young students to make a careful investigation before going abroad.

【点评】
第一段指出当前某种普遍的做法，之后分两点阐述人们支持这种做法的原因；第二段首句鲜明地指出自己反驳的意见，然后分两点来阐述理由；最后一段进行总结，并请当事人在做出决定前多加斟酌。
范文首句点题，指出青少年留学这一现象，并给出支持者的理由，即独立的生活会教会他们自信和坚持不懈，而且国外的教学水平会让学生进入更好的大学、找到更好的工作。第二段给出反对理由。首先，早期独立不一e799bee5baa6e997aee7ad94e58685e5aeb9330定是件好事。另外，太多的国外学校的目标是挣钱，所以它们的教学质量是令人质疑的。末段总结说青少年留学可能会带来好处，但令人担忧的问题也很多。
第一段第三句中的stand a better chance of表示“有更好的机会做某事”。第二段首句中的biased表示“偏激的，存有偏见的”；第三句中的aim at表示“目的在于”；第四句中的guarantee表示“保证”，adapt to表示“适应”，fierce表示“激烈的”，修饰competition(竞争)。