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九年级上册英语期末考试作文百(人教版)
你的同学Andy最近遇到一些问度题,请你参考所给要点提示,给Mr.Wang写一封80字左右的电子邮件问寻求帮助 要点提示:1.作业繁重没有时间做自己喜答欢的事 2.父母不允许我在业余时间玩,要求我把版更多的时间用到学习上 3.我总是担心考试不权及格
Mr.Wang
Hello
I met some problems recently, and I want to ask you
1 work hard don't have the time to do the things you like
2 parents don't allow me to play in his spare time, asked me to put more time into learning
3 I always worry about not passing the exam
Can you help me?
Andy
2010学年第一学期九年级英语期中考试作文分析
2010学年第一学期 2010学年第一学期 九年级英语期中考试 作文分析
内容分 分:开头总起1分;两条理由各 分; 内容分7分 开头总起 分 两条理由各2分 结尾总结1分;全文通顺条理性1分; 结尾总结 分 全文通顺条理性 分 ? 语法分 分:给分标准同以往; 语法分8分 给分标准同以往; ? 文采分3分:内容分与语法分的总得分达到 文采分3分 13分,可适当得到 分文采分; 分文采分; 分 可适当得到1-3分文采分
A. 全文行文通顺、条理清晰、言简意赅即可得文采分1分; B.(达到标准A的要求)7a686964616fe59b9ee7ad94365使用精彩漂亮的语句(词组、句型), 且合情合理,不显摆词汇量、不刻意堆砌,可得文采分2分; C.(达到标准B的要求)文采出众,论据有力,蕴涵深意, 令人回味,可得文采分3分。
需注意的问题: 需注意的问题:
内容方面: 内容方面: ? 审题不清,造成正文部分内容出现偏题:此为本次作 造成正文部分内容出现偏题:
文题中暴露出最严重的问题! 严重的问题! 试比较以下2个作文题的区别: Is it necessary for students to take cell phones to school? Is it necessary for students to use cell phones?
以下所列论据是否围绕文章主题呢? 以下所列论据是否围绕文章主题呢? ? Using cell phones for too long does harm to our health, for they produce a lot of radiation. What’s more, we’ll probably end up having poor eyesight. ? Almost all cell phones are multifunctional. They can be used as an electronic dictionary, a calculator and a powerful search engine. ? If unfortunately there’s an emergency, we can get in touch with our parents or friends immediately so that they can get us out of trouble in time. ? Cell phones can hold hundreds of individual phone numbers and help to take photos. In this way, we don’t bother writing the information down on paper and it really brings lots of convenience to our daily life.
始终用 始终用总?分?总的结构作为中考作文的基 本框架: 本框架:
A. 总起句开门见山,给出自己的观点,即回答第一个问题 总起句开门见山,给出自己的观点, (What’s your opinion on taking cell phones to school? Is it necessary?); );
B. 文章正文部分阐述理由,即回答第二个问题; 文章正文部分阐述理由,即回答第二个问题; 注意:根据作文要求,至少阐述2个理由 个理由, 注意:根据作文要求,至少阐述 个理由,且都切 实联系到school;2个理由必须从不同方面阐述, 个理由必须从不同方面阐述, 实联系到 ; 个理由必须从不同方面阐述 不重复、不雷同! 不重复、不雷同!
文章结尾部分必须再次陈述自己的观点, C. 文章结尾部分必须再次陈述自己的观点,与总起 句相呼应, 使用与总起句一模一样的句式。 句相呼应,但不宜使用与总起句一模一样的句式。
? With all kinds of colors and types, cell phones play important roles in our daily lives. ? Last but not least, cell phones are more than just a gadget for showing off. We really depend on them more than we realize nowadays.
语法方面(单句改错) 语法方面(单句改错)
? Cell phones enables the parents to communicate with their children. ? Students can use cell phones to send messages and play games, so cell phones let students do not listen to their teachers during the class. ? Some student might stay at school until very late. ? Children can text with their parents through cell phones and make their parents not worry why they’ll be late for home.
Three years ago, I was admitted to the City focus on high school. I together in the classroom window planted a peach tree and classmates. This peach to accompany us to learn together, live, to witness our efforts every day, every day to share the joy, share the every day troubles. Now peach tree has been covered with rich fruit, each of us also gain useful knowledge. We are about to embark on a new journey of learning, hope this tree can bear more fruit.
自己改动一下就行了
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